Friday, 16 June 2017

Reflection W7 T2

Description- Miss Reissmann
This week for writing we did a description on Miss Reissmann And heres mine





this week we also did a summary on our journal and here's mine It was hard but I did it.

THE BIG GAME

The Big Game is a pre season game The kids what to go to but  football is in the family so they do chores and help their mum around the house. They are from a small town so not much happens around the town so there really exited.




Here is my quick write for this week


It was a beautiful Sunny day the birds were singing I was driving in my Mclaren p1 When suddenly I spotted a Dead monkey But it was still eating a  banana Which I thought was suspicious maybe He was just sleeping but I was injected from my seat I landed in a circus tent full  of clowns my fear is clown’s the clown’s said “i'm coming for you” Which was scary to me I started running but I was on a treadmill. I was glued I couldn't get away “AAAAHHHH” I screamed the clown’s were getting closer Luckily I come unstuck I sprint away at 40000000 kph I get back to my car and start driving I’m looking through my window Bang I hit something I get out There's a clown But it's a ZOMBIE it rips of my arm I jump back in my car and hit it 17 more times now it's actually dead My car is full of blood I need the hospital I say to myself I drive to the hospital  But I walk in and everyone's a zombie hamburger  I eat them all I wake up “wow it was just a dream” I say but it wasn't it was deja vu . TEEHEE  



this is my cybersmart  infographic





1 comment:

  1. Hi Callum, I enjoyed reading your description of Miss Reissmann. I especially like how you have described her hair as I can pictue in my mind exactly how it looks. Next time you could add a personal anecdote that gives us an insight into your character's personality as this will help us really get to know your person. Very original quick write also, I love how the dead monkey was suspiciously eating a banana. What is your writing WALT so your readers can give you some specific feedback?

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Thank-you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.